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The long walk up [the hill, not a flat]

December 8, 2010
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We humans try to find patterns in everything. If basic math doesn’t work, move on to algebra. Still too chaotic? Then calculus. Or fractals. Or N-space. Finally quantum physics. Yet chaos and entropy are still firmly in control of our lives. The chaos is a creative force and the entropy a destructive force. The yin and yang of the universe. Nothing we write, we ponder is original. Besides the DNA we obey, the cultural imprint is deeply embedded in all our reflexive responses.

 

This week’s prompt at Magpie Tales is:

‘We are both the Id and the Empty Well’

Carefully bundled, hat, green with a yellow pom-pom, boots, black, coat blue, navy verging on ultramarine, scarf, hand-knitted, opened this very morning, rainbow of varied yarn, all from the markdown bin, mittens, too young still for gloves, yellow to match the pom-pom flopping with every labored step up the slick slope, a choice to make, middle or top, one safe, the other thrilling, tracing the footsteps of relatives now content to sip cider and gossip in front of the snapping pine, warmed by memories, tales shared, given to each generation in turn, the spell of the hill, and a red sled, and carefully bundled, she went all the way to the top… and slid home.

25 Comments leave one →
  1. Leah permalink
    December 8, 2010 4:46 pm

    “The spell of the hill” is beautifully said. Love the details of color against imagined whiteness of snow.

  2. annie permalink
    December 8, 2010 7:15 pm

    makes me wish i was still a little girl :)

  3. December 8, 2010 7:56 pm

    we need more snow here! Great post…lovely imagery.

  4. December 8, 2010 9:57 pm

    We can all be little girls now,
    though some of us are not,
    with our tassels, too small
    mittens, and red sled, all alone
    on that hill, under the spell,
    not ready for the fire and
    fellowship sought by the
    old ones; ready to fly solo
    just a red blur on a white
    canvas. I loved this poem,
    liked the style, liked the
    feel of it, and we are all so
    pleased that the princess
    /went all the way to the top/
    and then slid home/

  5. December 8, 2010 10:33 pm

    She slid home? As in, hit a tree and went to heaven? (That was my first thought!)

    Hooray for going all the way to the top!

  6. December 9, 2010 1:35 am

    Sliding home from the top of the hill… the only way to go.

  7. December 9, 2010 4:47 am

    Hey! I know those words! But can you explain a fractal, please?

    Rosebud …

  8. December 9, 2010 5:02 am

    Hiya Brian,

    I am totally confused about this magpie lark.
    Posting another’s entry and presenting it with gaps is considered original work?

    I like your paragraph. Very descriptive. Still the snapping pine escapes me.

    ‘Sapping’ pine I would have understood perfectly, as our Scotch pine drips resin in such quantities that we had to construct a roof over the path beneath it, as we were stuck to our clothes as with superglue :-) .

    • December 9, 2010 3:45 pm

      When pine burns, it snaps. I am totally confused by your statement. Magpie Tales offers a picture every Wednesday and you write from that prompt.

  9. December 9, 2010 10:21 am

    Wonderful…all the mittens, cider and pom-pom flopping.

  10. suz permalink
    December 9, 2010 10:28 am

    Oh this was wonderful
    loved the sound of it
    and the images it conjured up in my mind
    delightful..

  11. December 9, 2010 11:12 am

    This is prose poetry!!

    who hid that story for us to find

  12. December 9, 2010 1:17 pm

    Dear Brian: A very visual and tactile poem, the smell of the pine the taste of the cider. Being wholly lived in-the-moment. I sense this is happening now, the very little girl with the bright woolen scarf set with sled in tow! All with “the spell of the hill” in her eyes! A very creative poem!

  13. Helen permalink
    December 9, 2010 1:55 pm

    This is lovely …

  14. December 9, 2010 3:01 pm

    Wonderful! Makes me want to go out and take a ride down our sledding hill.

  15. December 9, 2010 3:44 pm

    Thanks everyone for your comments. Glad you can relate to the story.

  16. December 9, 2010 4:00 pm

    Nice flow and symmetry in the wording, and excellent use of images, little hints of character, and well- crafted details make this a very effective short study. Well-written and enjoyable, and an accomplishment, as prose-poetry is too-often a well of cliche. Nice magpie.

  17. December 9, 2010 7:04 pm

    What a lovely image – the family, the fire, the colorful and brave little sledder(ess). A winter movie!

  18. December 9, 2010 8:14 pm

    This is great–the attention to detail, the tradition, the imagery. Very nice. Mine is here. http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/12/09/ghost-of-christmas-past/

  19. December 12, 2010 2:41 pm

    Nice poem, I like the way the words connect to the picture! Thanks for posting it!

  20. December 12, 2010 2:42 pm

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  21. December 14, 2010 8:33 am

    Delightful! I’m one of those cider-sippers…

  22. Julie Leask-Wells permalink
    December 14, 2010 2:31 pm

    Beautiful, I totally got the “snapping pine”, it makes a very hot fire also. Merry Christmas to all!

  23. Jingle permalink
    December 19, 2010 6:59 pm

    special tale.
    beautiful writing…

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