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Making sense of writing

August 16, 2009
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Perhaps a hopeless task, but the most frequent question I receive is: How do you write that? When I write fiction I try to be as descriptive as possible while still being literary. However with poetry I try to be as obscure as possible without being stupid. Then I had an idea. Why don’t I write a short story then a free-verse poem and finally a haiku about the same subject? Free-verse gets a bad rap, meter and rhyme are considered superior poetry, but I prefer to write as I think, rather than as an artistic expression.

“Hot meals and utensils”

Every Sunday, at the local Methodist church, after the 9:30 service, a group of volunteers, most from the church, but not all, went downstairs. Below the vestry and the waterline – the basement had been resealed last month – there was a kitchen, a storage room with long folding tables, chipped and battered, not unlike the congregation; still serviceable, needing replacement parts, too expensive for now. Long years of practice, a gracious ballet, chores done willingly, yet, every Sunday, there was more to do and less to offer. By 11:30, the side door opened, the line, patient; seamed faces, ragged cuffs, whimpering babies, vacant stares waiting, waiting for a free meal: for most, the only food of the day.

“Hot meals and utensils”

more to do
less to offer
always patient
they waited
every Sunday
a free meal
long folding tables
chipped and battered
they waited
only food of the day

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Haiku
———————–

free meal they waited
more to do less to offer
long folding tables

21 Comments leave one →
  1. August 16, 2009 9:32 am

    I also added a link to Spatherdab on the top right. She’s the best poet I’ve read and I love her work.

  2. RASJ permalink
    August 16, 2009 9:36 am

    What a great exercise! I often play these kinds of “word games” with myself as they sometimes reveal a real gem. I have so much to tell you – and at some point I will. I’m gearing up for the upcoming school year, and my Monkey will be home from summer camp in 3 days. But there is much to process about writing books – so we’ll catch up! I promise! xoxo

  3. August 16, 2009 12:29 pm

    oh you are such a clever bunny :lol:

    interesting what you have to say about free form poetry ;)

  4. August 16, 2009 12:35 pm

    Very nice. :) My favorite is the free-verse poem.
    I often start my blog posts this way
    then go back
    filling in the blanks

    off to the store I now go
    in the rain
    with 3 boys

  5. August 16, 2009 1:07 pm

    I think your free verse said it best. I am used to my poetry leaving out important details, like transitions between POV, but not so much my prose.

  6. August 16, 2009 9:15 pm

    We may be conditioned, and everyone likes a good book, but sometimes less is more.

  7. August 17, 2009 12:55 am

    Very fun! Like cutting things down to their very essence, without losing any of the impact. Thanks for sharing!

  8. August 17, 2009 3:48 am

    Well done. By the way, I think being literary IS doing it how you want to. It’s only publishers who’ve forgotten that :-)

  9. DaBich permalink
    August 17, 2009 5:10 am

    Hey Bri! What a nice surprise to see you in my inbox this morning. I see you’ve been proliferate as always. Do you ever rest? Hope the summer is being good to you. Hubs and I will do vacation soon, nothing major, just time off from work. I’m glad you remember me! HUGZ!

  10. August 17, 2009 4:10 pm

    Love the free verse! It says just enough. But I also like your description of the volunteers, too, in the prose.

  11. August 19, 2009 4:52 am

    This strikes a chord with me. All of it.

    this journey started the right way

  12. August 20, 2009 1:19 pm

    I fully agree with the comment above (by kinziblog) about not “losing any of the impact.” In each of the three versions, poverty is shown, along with charity. I most liked the use of the line (and image of) “long folding tables” in all three pieces.

  13. August 22, 2009 3:17 pm

    I think long folding tables is a consensus favorite.

  14. August 25, 2009 8:49 pm

    I loved this piece – all three forms. I’ve been having a good afternoon browsing through your blog posts. I am very new to blogging myself – but its never too late to learn. I am hoping, through blogging, to find a poetry writing group – on the internet! I am always looking for an audience for the poems I write – particularly one that is not part of my circle of family and friends who are forced by loyalty to be appreciative! I find you inspiring – tell me please how you do it.

  15. August 29, 2009 4:46 pm

    This was so clever…you got the feeling and emotion across in each one.

  16. August 29, 2009 5:56 pm

    I think you expressed it well in all three forms. I think I like the prose version best. I think the prose version IS poetry – sharply descriptive and thoughtfully worded. That doesn’t mean that I don’t think that the poetic versions are good too. (double negative!). Cut out the last DN sentence and just accept that I think all the forms are excellent!

    I always enjoy your Sunday Scribblings’ offerings.

  17. August 29, 2009 8:07 pm

    Hi Brian! I must try this it worked nicely. Thank you!

  18. August 30, 2009 12:28 am

    Very Interesting thoughts. Descriptive- > free verse poem -> haiku….great way to go.

    Am still evolving as a free verse writer.But i could sense a great freedom and better flow…

  19. August 30, 2009 3:53 pm

    makes you think.

  20. August 31, 2009 7:48 am

    How many times I have been helping set up long folding tables, peeling potatoes, warming casseroles, trying do decide just how much salt should go in that HUGE pot of soup – loved loved loved all three…

  21. August 31, 2009 1:27 pm

    Thanks. :)

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