The change on November 4th

2008 October 22

The prompts for Read~Write~Poem have recently moved from Monday to Thursday and now include both a visual and word prompt. Another Thursday site is Totally Optional Prompts with a word prompt. Still another is Thursday Thirteen so given that my blogging flip-flops more than the candidates do I decided to do all four prompts in one.

Totally Optional Prompts: Justice/Injustice

Read~Write~Poem Prompt: Echolalia [To save you the trouble of a search, here is the definition.]
meaningless repetition of another person’s spoken words as a symptom of psychiatric disorder.
• repetition of speech by a child learning to talk.
ORIGIN late 19th cent.: modern Latin, from Greek ēkhō ‘echo’ + lalia ‘speech.’

My 5th Thursday Thirteen: Any use of thirteen in this case thirteen stanzas.

Read~Write~Poem visual Prompt:

Retrospective of a Myth. Drawing. by RossinaBossioB

“Taller in person”

I. You’ve had too much to drink dear
strident whispers, embarrassed
guilt over his weak submission to her

II. too much to drink, too much to drink
too much to drink, too much to drink
no, no, no, no, no
silly man, I need more, more, more

III. I’m not a silly man dear
fierce whispers, embarrassed
guilt over his lustful longing for her

IV. silly man, silly man, silly man, silly man
not you dear, him, promises, promises
cut your taxes with axes and we all
fall down, fall down, fall down

V. Stop saying those things dear
fearful whispers, embarrassed
guilt over his shamed feelings for her

VI. those things, those things, those things,
such naughty things are banks and loans
save the banks before they fail, before they fail
before they fail, we must bail, bail, bail

VII. You can’t meet him dear
alarmed whispers, embarrassed
guilt over his queasy reaction to her

VIII. meet, meet, meet, tasty meat, tasty meat
fetch me a fresh drink dear
popping credit bubbles in trouble
credit bubbles, credit bubbles, credit bubbles

IX. A refill please for my wife dear
casual whisper, embarrassed
guilt over his glance directed at her

X. thanks big spender, you maverick you
maverick you, maverick you, how’s my
lipstick do you want to kiss
the moose, the moose, the moose, the moose

XI. She wants to shake your hand dear
amazed whispers, embarrassed
guilt over his clothes compared to her

XII. yes I fight for justice it’s true,
thanks to you, to you, to you, we have
a home from acorn grown, acorn grown
a plumber’s work is never done, never done

XIII. That was very awkward dear
angry whispers, embarrassed
guilt over his shabby treatment of her

18 Responses leave one →
  1. 2008 October 22

    I love I love I love the way
    you’ve weaved weaved weaved
    all your prompts all your prompts
    together so well so well

    do men have a ‘guilt’ gene?

  2. 2008 October 22

    A nice mix of … well … everything.

  3. 2008 October 22

    Well, this was brilliantly done. What a great idea!

  4. 2008 October 22

    I like that!

  5. 2008 October 22

    Great list…Happy TT:)

  6. 2008 October 22

    what a well written post!!!

  7. 2008 October 23

    Even meaningless repetition takes on a new meaning, under the influence of alcohol.

  8. 2008 October 23

    LOve this! The conversation is great and the way you worked the prompts – Wow!

  9. 2008 October 23

    Glad you liked this everyone.

  10. 2008 October 23

    Wow. I love how you weaved two different themes together to produce this piece. Your use of repetition is effective, too.

    -Nicole

  11. 2008 October 23

    Excellent – the repetition resembles the speeches recently heard. Enjoyed this!

  12. 2008 October 23

    Great poem – very interesting repetitions.

  13. 2008 October 23

    Very interesting, you have a gift there.

  14. 2008 October 23

    It takes talent to use repetition so that it doesn’t sound…well…repetitive! Great job!

  15. 2008 October 23

    Reminds me of the time a few of us decided to write poems using the words played in our most recent Scrabble game. The results were all so different…. here in the comments: http://www.looseleafnotes.com/notes/2008/03/the_charlies_angels_of_scrabbl.html#comments

  16. 2008 October 24

    It works, Brian. Good going!

    echoes reverbate

  17. 2008 October 24

    I love the rhythm and the emotion. I can “feel” the hot prickles of embarrassment running up his neck.

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