Hunting in the jungle

2008 August 4
by Brian

This week for Read~Write~Poem the prompt is ‘Smell’. I went back and forth on what to write but decided to stay with my first impulse.

“Mating rituals”

the waning moon dodged the scudding wrack of clouds blown apart by winds howling over the jagged peaks looming high over the buildings slowly turning dark floor by floor

harsh chemicals could not mask the scent

she growled in her chest gone tight and stood on legs fluid with need and anticipation for the chase so long in coming through the dark streets empty of all but her targeted prey

moldy leftovers whiffed in disgust

he dropped from suddenly nerveless fingers and shivered when open night window allowed hint of fate amongst garbage and stale death in alleyways strewn with empty hopes

plumes of exhaust wavered from drains

on the move she loped across the silent city the few spotting knew of her quest and gave way knowing it was not their turn this time but wishing soon to smell the mate for them

sweating fear left a clear trace

despite countless warnings the actuality of flight was driven by sheer instinct as hormones reacted to the ever closing female determined to subdue the chosen male in heat

cool damp fog and sharp pine

shedding clothes the waning moon showed glistening breasts and shining thighs pumping in ancient rhythm reaching out to desperate flight and pouncing on rigid form

sunrise and satiated mix of tangy fluids

15 Responses leave one →
  1. 2008 August 4

    After reading this I have visions in my mind of garbage, dirty alley ways and things unclean. These are not usually images that come to mind when I think “sex”.

  2. 2008 August 4

    There was a rawness to this. It certainly pulled me in.

  3. 2008 August 4

    I loved your juxtaposition with storytelling and your description of odors. Well crafted and vivid. I have to echo Anthony’ comment about its raw quality, too.

    -Nicole

  4. 2008 August 4

    This is incredible. I like the highs and lows.

    yellowed piece of paper

  5. 2008 August 4

    excellent write brian… a workout for both the imagination and the senses……

  6. 2008 August 4

    vampires? werewolves?

  7. 2008 August 4

    Good afternoon everyone, I think I got caught up to all the comments over the weekend.

    This poem here I wrote because my first thought of smell was how we react and are attracted by scent. As to the species in the poem, I’ll leave that up to you dear readers. :)

  8. 2008 August 4

    Your blog has been randomly selected to be the featured blog at Heads Or Tails.

  9. 2008 August 4

    Brian, thank you, for your continuing support! Now, that aside, grin, I started to read this and stopped, afraid of where you took it, my eyes went down a bit on the page, and I said, oh, good, just sex. Glad I read the whole thing!

  10. 2008 August 5
    jorc709 permalink

    the hunt…very exciting!

    jorc
    empty garden

  11. 2008 August 5

    Thanks everyone for all the comments. :)

  12. 2008 August 6
    ann permalink

    maybe this wonderful piece of writing have been saved
    for your Friday prompt of “what’s on your mind?” ;)

    it’s certainly on mind now you rotten so and so :)

  13. 2008 August 6

    Ann….. you just wait my pretty.

  14. 2008 August 6

    I like the long lines interspersed with the shorter ones (almost has the rhythm of sex as well as the smells, doesn’t it?), the lack of punctuation – gives it a dreamy, desperate quality

  15. 2008 August 15

    i love the structure of this poem too, really makes the images stand out almost in relief

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